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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Nowadays, most countries improve their living standards through economic development. However, some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?


To be honest, economic and social development cannot take place at the same time.
In order to become an economically prosperous country, I think we have to give up some human rights.
In order to find human rights, I think we have to give up some economic benefits. This is the same for any country, and there are no exceptions. However, I think that reducing the rate of abandonment and increasing the gains is the way to succeed, and the income level varies depending on how much it is applied.

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Hi there Lee~!^^ You missed the class today! How are you? Anyway, thanks again for accomplishing your essay. Good job! Have a great weekend! See you on Monday.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
To be honest, economic and social development cannot take place at the same time.
>>> CORRECT~^^!
OR>>> To be frank, economic and social development often seem to conflict with one another.
In order to become an economically prosperous country, I think we have to give up some human rights.
 >>>Achieving economic prosperity sometimes requires compromises on human rights
In order to find human rights, I think we have to give up some economic benefits. 
>>> To prioritize human rights, we may need to forgo certain economic benefits.
This is the same for any country, and there are no exceptions. 
>>> CORRECT!~^^
However, I think that reducing the rate of abandonment and increasing the gains is the way to succeed, and the income level varies depending on how much is applied.
>>> CORRECT!~^^


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