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Job compensation vs Job satisfaction

작성자: 박*경
2024-10-10 96

회원님의 영작문

Recently, the issue of incentives in job field has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that high salaries are most important requirement in job choice, and others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to repute question the idea that a large number of wages are the top priority. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that money is fundamental condition in maintaining our life. If we are paid in a low level, it would be tricky to keep our lives. For this reason, there does seem to be a solid basis for several arguments in favour of high amount of wages.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that salaries are only one standard of job choice. The oft-cited argument such a view is that job satisfaction can be more critical qualification. We can't work well and make a good result.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Ms. Casey! As I see it, they are both considered essential in deciding what job one must have. Though, personally, one of the factors of being fully satisfied with a job is getting the compensation you think you deserve. 
-T. Sonny
Recently, the issue of incentives in job field has become the subject of heated debate. 
>>Recently, the issue of incentives in the job field has become a subject of heated debate. 
Some people assert that high salaries are most important requirement in job choice, and others argue otherwise. 
>>Some people assert that high salaries are the most important requirement in choosing a job, and others argue otherwise. 
Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. 
>>I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. 
the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
>>Correct!
On the one hand, it seems difficult to repute question the idea that a large number of wages are the top priority. 
>>On one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that a high wage is the top priority. 
Perhaps the most compelling reason is that money is fundamental condition in maintaining our life. 
>>Perhaps the most compelling reason is that money is a fundamental matter in maintaining our lives. 
If we are paid in a low level, it would be tricky to keep our lives. 
>>If we are paid low, it would be challenging to live.
For this reason, there does seem to be a solid basis for several arguments in favour of high amount of wages.
>>For this reason, there does seem to be a solid basis for several arguments in favor of high amount of wages.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that salaries are only one standard of job choice. 
>>On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that salaries are only one standard of career choice. 
The oft-cited argument such a view is that job satisfaction can be more critical qualification. 
>>The oft-cited argument for such a view is that job satisfaction can be a more critical qualification. 
We can't work well and make a good result.
>>We can't work well and make good results.

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