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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Writing task: A high compensation is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

Answer:
In my case,satification important than high compensation because during the worked as nurse on hospital I had struggle.
of course, I was salary high but my phisically ann mentally difficult.
So I changed to my job. now I am very comfortable even lower salary

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Hello, Ms. Nala! It could be very hard to find a job that has a work-life balance. I am glad that you are now more comfortable with your current job. I think, your physical and mental health are more important than the high pay so I would say that you have made a good decision! 
-T. Sonny
In my case,satification important than high compensation because during the worked as nurse on hospital I had struggle.
>>In my case, satisfaction is more important than high compensation because when I worked as a nurse at a hospital, I struggled.
of course, I was salary high but my phisically ann mentally difficult.
>>Of course, I had a high salary but it was physically and mentally difficult for me.
So I changed to my job. 
>>That's why I changed my job.
now I am very comfortable even lower salary
>>Now, I am very comfortable with it even though the compensation is lower.
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