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I\'ve been using my cell phone since I was young.

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Since I was in elementary school, I have contacted my phone by message or call, so I don't remember it very well, but in my memory, I waited in front of my friend's house to come out while calling her name.

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Hi!

I enjoyed reading your memory about using your cell phone. Waiting for a friend while calling her name is something many of us can relate to. It¡¯s amazing to see how much technology has changed over the years, from how we used to call friends to how we stay connected today. It really shows how much our lives have evolved with technology. Great job, and keep practicing your writing!

~Teacher Cathy

 

Since I was in elementary school, I have contacted my phone by message or call, so I don't remember it very well, but in my memory, I waited in front of my friend's house to come out while calling her name.

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OR>>Since elementary school, I've usually contacted my friends by message or call, so I don't remember this very clearly. But in my memory, I waited in front of my friend's house, calling her name to come out.

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