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-The disciples are arranged in groups of three with Jesus at the center.
-The painting features a composition where figures are positioned on one side of the table.
-Unlike previous paintings, Judas the Traitor is depicted in a shaded manner, giving a feeling of exclusion.

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Hi Justin!
The grammar in each sentence is correct.
However, there are minor adjustments to be done to make your writing clearer.
Take note of the changes below.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
The disciples are arranged in groups of three with Jesus at the center.
>> The disciples are arranged in groups of three, with Jesus at the center.
The painting features a composition where figures are positioned on one side of the table.
>> The painting features a composition where the figures are positioned on one side of the table.
Unlike previous paintings, Judas the Traitor is depicted in a shaded manner, giving a feeling of exclusion.
>> Unlike in previous paintings, Judas the Traitor is depicted in a shaded manner, giving a feeling of exclusion.
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