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2024-10-08 1521

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Pet owners usually consider the pets to children.
Such as phenomenon has advantages and disadvantages.
Rasing pets can treat many psychological disease.
Its positive response makes people feel delighted and comfortable.
But it can result in avoiding having kids too.
Sometimes having kids is more growing myself.
We need to be patient.

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Ms. Sunny!
I agree with you, most people who have pets treat their pets as a family members. they dress them, feed them well, and let them sleep on their bed. This is a psychological issue that may lead to negative and positive results.
Thank you for your homework!
Aki~

Pet owners usually consider the pets to children.
>>> Pet owners usually consider their pets as children.

Such as phenomenon has advantages and disadvantages.
>>> Such a phenomenon has advantages and disadvantages.

Rasing pets can treat many psychological disease.
>>> Raising pets can treat many psychological diseases.

Its positive response makes people feel delighted and comfortable.
>>> CORRECT!

But it can result in avoiding having kids too.
>>> CORRECT!

Sometimes having kids is more growing myself.
>>>  Sometimes having kids is more like raising ourselves.

We need to be patient.
>>> CORRECT!
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