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Who plays a more substantial role in a person\'s life, family or friends?

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Before I begin writing, I have a question for you. If your friend or parent fell into water, who would you save first? In my case, I would save my parents because I think the value of family for me is more important than my friend.
First, family can provide unconditional support. Family often provides a foundation of unconditional love and support. They are typically the first source of emotional and financial assistance during challenging times.
Second, family have cultural and traditional values. Families often instill cultural values and traditions that shape an individual's identity and worldview. This can create a strong sense of belonging and continuity.
Third, family can have long-term relationships with their children. Family relationships are usually lifelong, providing a consistent support system throughout various life stages, including transitions such as marriage, parenthood, and aging.

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Hi Hana! Kudos on this one! Family always get your back. If we have a nurturing environment, it manifest

Before I begin writing, I have a question for you.
>> CORRECT
If your friend or parent fell into water, who would you save first?
>> CORRECT
In my case, I would save my parents because I think the value of family for me is more important than my friend.
>> CORRECT
First, family can provide unconditional support. 
>> CORRECT
Family often provides a foundation of unconditional love and support. 
>> CORRECT
They are typically the first source of emotional and financial assistance during challenging times.
>> CORRECT
Second, family have cultural and traditional values. 
>> Second, family has cultural and traditional values.
Families often instill cultural values and traditions that shape an individual's identity and worldview. 
>> CORRECT
This can create a strong sense of belonging and continuity.
>> CORRECT
Third, family can have long-term relationships with their children. 
>> Third, families can have long-term relationships with their children.
Family relationships are usually lifelong, providing a consistent support system throughout various life stages, including transitions such as marriage, parenthood, and aging.
>> CORRECT
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