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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people think that a person improves intellectual skills better when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

Group activities help to derive higher knowledge.
When the average person plans a project, they ice break, and I think that can be a good example.
A person's thoughts may have limitations in deriving higher results, but if several people's thoughts are gathered, they will be able to derive higher results.
Two heads are better than one. I trust this words.

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Hi there Lee~! ^^ Great job! Your essay clearly shows your understanding of the dispute and its key issues, and you explained everything in an easy-to-follow manner.

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Group activities help to derive higher knowledge.

>>> Group activities promote deeper understanding and knowledge.
When the average person plans a project, they ice break, and I think that can be a good example.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> When the average person plans a project, they often start with icebreakers, which can serve as a great example.
A person's thoughts may have limitations in deriving higher results, but if several people's thoughts are gathered, they will be able to derive higher results.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> A person's thoughts can be limited in achieving great results, but when multiple people share their ideas, they can achieve more.

Two heads are better than one.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

 I trust this words.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> I trust this saying.

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