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When I talk with someone who I meet first, I usually choose the topic that is related to personality including MBTI. It is really common topic for everybody because that topic is suitable for small talk.
However, there are some topics that I don't want to talk about with someone who I meet first or I don't know well. First, it is a family history. In korea, family history can be a sensitive topic for someone. To be more specific, there can be someone who don't want to speak about their mom, dad, or their brother or sister. Not all families have a warm atmosphere. It depends on everybody. So I don't talk about a family history in this situation.
Second, the university. In korea, thr hierarcy of university is really important thing among students. Not only teenager but also students of university, maybe all students in korea find this critical. It also can be a sensitive topic, so avoding this topic is a tacit rule among people who don't know well one another.

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Hello, Ms. Casey! You're right. There are certain topics that might be sensitive to other people but not to you. We have to be mindful of these things when meeting people as they could also affect the kind of relationship you could have with the person you are talking to. Thank you for sharing!
-T. Sonny
When I talk with someone who I meet first, I usually choose the topic that is related to personality including MBTI. 
>>When I talk with someone who I meet for the first time, I usually choose a topic that is related to personality including MBTI. 
It is really common topic for everybody because that topic is suitable for small talk.
>>It is a very common topic for everybody because it is suitable for small talks.
However, there are some topics that I don't want to talk about with someone who I meet first or I don't know well. 
>>However, there are some topics that I don't want to talk about with someone who I just met or I don't know well. 
First, it is a family history. 
>>First is family history.
In korea, family history can be a sensitive topic for someone. 
>>In Korea, family history can be a sensitive topic for someone. 
To be more specific, there can be someone who don't want to speak about their mom, dad, or their brother or sister. 
>>To be more specific, there can be someone who doesn't want to speak about their mom, dad, or their brother or sister. 
Not all families have a warm atmosphere. 
>>Not all families are warm with each other.
It depends on everybody. 
>>Correct!
So I don't talk about a family history in this situation.
>>Hence, I don't talk about family history in this situation.
Second, the university. 
>>Second is the university where they came from.
In korea, thr hierarcy of university is really important thing among students. Not only teenager but also students of university, maybe all students in korea find this critical. 
>>In Korea, the hierarchy of universities matters so much among students. 
Not only teenager but also students of university, maybe all students in korea find this critical. 
>>Not only teenagers but also university students; maybe all students in Korea find this critical. 
It also can be a sensitive topic, so avoding this topic is a tacit rule among people who don't know well one another.
>>It also can be a sensitive topic, so avoiding this topic is a tacit rule among people who don't know each other very well.

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