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1. What kind of organization are you dreaming of creating?
A) The organization I want to create is an organization that makes our lives richer than we are now.
Any organization that makes new changes that we have not done so far would be great.
And in my case, I want to create an organization about music and literature.

2. What are the most common organizations in your country and what are they for?
A) Korea was a country that valued school ties and regionalism.
So there were many university alumni associations and hometown associations.
Now there are many organizations about hobbies, and now this is the most common organization.

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Hi, David.

Thank you for answering these questions well. You have expressed yourself well. I can tell that you are genuine with your answers. Well done! 

Sincerely,
Teacher Dana

1. What kind of organization are you dreaming of creating?
A) The organization I want to create is an organization that makes our lives richer than we are now.
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The organization I want to create would enrich our lives beyond where we are now.

Any organization that makes new changes that we have not done so far would be great.
>>>CORRECT or 
Any organization that brings about changes we've not yet experienced would be ideal.

And in my case, I want to create an organization about music and literature.
>>>CORRECT or 
Personally, I want to establish an organization focused on music and literature.

2. What are the most common organizations in your country and what are they for?
A) Korea was a country that valued school ties and regionalism.
>>>CORRECT or 
Korea has historically placed great value on school affiliations and regional ties.

So there were many university alumni associations and hometown associations.
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As a result, there were many university alumni associations and hometown associations.

Now there are many organizations about hobbies, and now this is the most common organization.
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These days, hobby-based organizations are more common, and they are now the most prevalent type of organization
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