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I thought deeply about this 'cause I had some trouble with my old friend lately.
First, when we want to know someone is good or not, I think we should meet them when they are not in good mood. I believe 'good friends' don't use their bad feelings to attack other people. Instead, they ask some help or leave themselves alone for a while. They're not acting like a child, who is not good at dealing with emotions.
But I also know people can't be always perfect, so sometimes they may do that by overcoming with their anger. Then, if they apologize and promise don't do that again, it's okay. I can forgive them.

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Hi Sydney! ^^  

I can define a good friend as someone who will not betray you. 
Friends will always have your back but would not tolerate your wrongdoings. 

Andrea 


I thought deeply about this 'cause I had some trouble with my old friend lately.
>> Correct 

First, when we want to know someone is good or not, I think we should meet them when they are not in good mood. 
>> First, when we want to know if someone is good or not, I think we should meet them when they are not in a good mood. 

I believe 'good friends' don't use their bad feelings to attack other people. 
>> Correct 

Instead, they ask some help or leave themselves alone for a while. 
>> Instead, they would ask for help or leave for a while to have an alone time for themselves. 

They're not acting like a child, who is not good at dealing with emotions.
>> They are not immature people who cannot deal with emotions.

But I also know people can't be always perfect, so sometimes they may do that by overcoming with their anger. 
>> But I also know people can't always be perfect, so sometimes they do things to help them overcome their anger. 

Then, if they apologize and promise don't do that again, it's okay. I can forgive them.
>> Then if they apologize and promise not to do that again, I can forgive them. 
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