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1. What¡¯s the best hobby anyone could have?
To be able to have it by anyone, it has to cost a minimum or it doesn't cost money.
There seem to be many good applications on mobile phones these days.
There are many program for Stretching or exercising that looks at the cell phone screen and we can follow it without the help of special instrument or teaching coaches.
I've done it before, and it's very useful.
However, it is not always easy to sustain a hobby that one does alone.

2. Why should/shouldn¡¯t we have hobbies?
Hobbies can't be everything in my life.
However, when I do work for my life, my hobby gives me motivation to work harder and gives me wisdom to solve the problems when I meet difficult things.
And knowing another world can make my life richer.

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Hi! I'm so pleased you took the time to complete the homework. You did an excellent job sharing your experiences and ideas—keep up the great work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^

1. What¡¯s the best hobby anyone could have?
To be able to have it by anyone, it has to cost a minimum or it doesn't cost money.
>>In order for something to be accessible to everyone, it either has to cost a minimum amount or be free of charge.  

There seem to be many good applications on mobile phones these days.
>> There seem to be many good applications available on mobile phones these days.

There are many program for Stretching or exercising that looks at the cell phone screen and we can follow it without the help of special instrument or teaching coaches.
>> There are several stretching or exercise programs that allow us to follow along just by looking at the phone screen, without the need for special equipment or a coach.

I've done it before, and it's very useful.
>> Correct
OR >>  I've tried it before, and it¡¯s very useful.

However, it is not always easy to sustain a hobby that one does alone.
>> Correct
OR >> However, it¡¯s not always easy to maintain a hobby when doing it alo
ne.



2. Why should/shouldn¡¯t we have hobbies?
Hobbies can't be everything in my life.
>> Correct
OR >> Hobbies cannot be the sole focus of my life. 

However, when I do work for my life, my hobby gives me motivation to work harder and gives me wisdom to solve the problems when I meet difficult things.
>>However, when I work, my hobbies provide me with motivation to work harder and give me the wisdom to solve problems when I face difficulties.

And knowing another world can make my life richer.
>>Exploring different interests can also enrich my life.
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