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Which is a better way to spend your holiday, go away on vacation or go on staycation?

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2024-10-01 1

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What do you do in your holiday? I usually go on staycation in my holiday.
First, staycation helps me save my money. When I go outside, I absolutely spend my money. However, when I go on staycation, I don't often use my money. It is always better to cut down on expenses.
Second, Going on staycation can save moving time. When I in my own place, I can do lots of activities in there. For example, I can watch movies, cook something, or sleep in my home. It's very convenient and comfortable.
Actually, I often choose going on staycation because I'm homebody and also like my house. What is your preference?

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Hi, Hana! I consider myself in the middle of the two options. I sometimes want to have a get away, to have some fresh air. But oftentimes, I'm too lazy to go out and the constant movement easily annoy. Thank you for sharing a lot. Let's talk again soon.
--Teacher Anji

What do you do in your holiday?
>> What do you do on your holidays?
 I usually go on staycation in my holiday.
>> I usually go on a staycation during my holidays.
First, staycation helps me save my money. 
>> First, a staycation helps me save money.
When I go outside, I absolutely spend my money. 
>> When I go out, I definitely spend money
However, when I go on staycation, I don't often use my money. 
>> However, when I go on a staycation, I don¡¯t spend much money.
It is always better to cut down on expenses.
>> CORRECT
Second, Going on staycation can save moving time. 
>> Second, going on a staycation can save travel time.
When I in my own place, I can do lots of activities in there. 
>> When I'm at home, I can do lots of activities there.
For example, I can watch movies, cook something, or sleep in my home. 
>> For example, I can watch movies, cook something, or relax at home.
It's very convenient and comfortable.
>> CORRECT
Actually, I often choose going on staycation because I'm homebody and also like my house.
>> Actually, I often choose to go on a staycation because I'm a homebody and I like my house.
What is your preference?
>> CORRECT
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