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Hiking gives us to be patient and a sense of accomplishment.
When I was looking at the mountain I felt my concern was nothing and I decided not to give up my goal.
Hiking makes me to be more generous to others.
It comes from my happiness result of going mountain.
I think the confidence and the happiness are the basic of every therapy.

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Ms. Sunny!
These kinds of activities make our body release hormone that helps us think well. That is why if you are under stress, do some physical activities.
I'm grateful that you were able to have some life reflections while hiking.
Aki~

Hiking gives us to be patient and a sense of accomplishment.
>>> Hiking gives us patience and a sense of accomplishment.

When I was looking at the mountain I felt my concern was nothing and I decided not to give up my goal.
>>> CORRECT!

Hiking makes me to be more generous to others.
>>> CORRECT!

It comes from my happiness result of going mountain.
>>> CORRECT!

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