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What sports game is best watched at home, not at a stadium? Why?

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I think the best watched sports game at home is soccer, baseball, basketball, and volleyball because these are often on TV.
And because when we think of sports, it comes to mind.

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                        What sports game is best watched at home, not at a stadium? Why?


I think the best watched sports game at home is soccer, baseball, basketball, and volleyball because these are often on TV.
>> I think the best-watched sports games at home are soccer, baseball, basketball, and volleyball because these are often on TV.

And because when we think of sports, it comes to mind.
>> And because when we think of sports, they come to mind.
>> OR: Also, these come to mind when we think of sports games. 
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