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How do you prioritize your physical health in your daily routine?

I used to not care of my physical healthy before.
I considered that I can be healthy without some caring me.
Bcause I could maintain my weight consistantly if I ate some dishes.
But now I changed my body and weight.
So I modified my mind.
At first, I must drink a mixed coffee. Only a cup of coffee, a day.
Second, I must not eat as much as bombed my stomache.
third, I must go to work out a day of a week.
I still strive to keep these promises for me.
However, I¡¯m sometimes be lazy person and be mad at foods.
Don¡¯t worry. It do not come the health,But my mind back early.

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Hi, Stella! Thank you for sharing your health routines. May you always stay active and healthy. ^^ Have a great weekend with your family!
~T. Jewel
I used to not care of my physical healthy before.
>>I used not to care about my physical health before.
I considered that I can be healthy without some caring me.
>>I thought I could be healthy without taking care of myself.
Bcause I could maintain my weight consistantly if I ate some dishes.
>>I could maintain my weight consistently if I ate certain foods.
But now I changed my body and weight.
>>But now, my body and weight have changed.
So I modified my mind.
>>So I changed my mindset.
At first, I must drink a mixed coffee. Only a cup of coffee, a day.
>>First, I must drink only one cup of mixed coffee a day.
Second, I must not eat as much as bombed my stomache.
>>Second, I must not eat so much that I feel like my stomach is going to explode.
third, I must go to work out a day of a week.
>>Third, I must work out once a week.
I still strive to keep these promises for me.
>>CORRECT
OR
>>I still strive to keep these promises to myself.

However, I¡¯m sometimes be lazy person and be mad at foods.
>>However, I can sometimes be lazy and get mad at food.
Don¡¯t worry. It do not come the health,But my mind back early.
>>But I don't worry because it doesn't affect my health and puts my mind at ease.
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