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Q) Getting to know people while drinking is a concept most adults do.
What drink will you order if you will be drinking it with a person you just met.

A) It is clear that drinking together is the good way to get to know each other and get closer.
If I have to drink with someone who I just met or he is a new person, the light beer would be good.
And I think it would be good to meet in a place that is not too loud.

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Hi, David.

Your answer is thoughtful, and you¡¯ve expressed your ideas well. I¡¯ve made some small adjustments to improve clarity and flow. Keep up the great work!

Best,
Teacher Dana

It is clear that drinking together is the good way to get to know each other and get closer.
>>> CORRECT or It is clear that drinking together is a good way to get to know each other and build a connection.

If I have to drink with someone who I just met or he is a new person, the light beer would be good.
>>>If I¡¯m drinking with someone I¡¯ve just met, a light beer would be a good choice.

And I think it would be good to meet in a place that is not too loud.
>>>I also think it¡¯s best to meet in a place that¡¯s not too loud.
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