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networks important for getting jobs

작성자: 박*경
2024-09-26 41

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Friendship networks are really important for getting jobs in Korea. When we were young, we trust that the person who is skillful and talented absolutely get a well-paid job, getting a good reputation. It is true partly, but, not always. Maybe it was a illusion, and we could think like that because we didn't know anything about real society. In Korea, friendship networks are the most important condition in some industry. For example, lawyer, entertainment industries are typical. Actually, the industry many elites specialize in is representative of this case. Elites form their own networks including school ties and they help each other when they try to get a job. Sometimes, It can be work unfairly for other people who are out of their networks. Of course there are many jobs whoever can work in, and in the majority of cases these jobs include basic duties. Even in these field, friends networking can be beneficial for some people.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Ms. Casey! This is something that also exists in the Philippines but is more common in the school setting. There are instances when students get special treatment especially if their parents have special connections in the school or anyone who is well-known. I guess that's the harsh and unfair reality.
-T. Sonny
Friendship networks are really important for getting jobs in Korea. 
>>Correct!
When we were young, we trust that the person who is skillful and talented absolutely get a well-paid job, getting a good reputation. 
>>When we were young, we trust people who are skillful, talented, has a well-paid job and has a good reputation. 
It is true partly, but, not always. 
>>It is partly true, but, not always. 
Maybe it was a illusion, and we could think like that because we didn't know anything about real society. 
>>Maybe it was an illusion, and we used to think like that because we didn't know anything about the real society. 
In Korea, friendship networks are the most important condition in some industry. 
>>In Korea, friendship network is the most important factor for some industries. 
For example, lawyer, entertainment industries are typical. 
>>The typical examples would be people who work in the field of law and entertainment.
Actually, the industry many elites specialize in is representative of this case. 
>>Actually, many elites who are professionals are the best example for this case.
Elites form their own networks including school ties and they help each other when they try to get a job. 
>>Elites form their own networks including school connections and help each other when getting a job. 
Sometimes, It can be work unfairly for other people who are out of their networks. 
>>Sometimes, it can be unfair for other people who are not a part of their networks.
Of course there are many jobs whoever can work in, and in the majority of cases these jobs include basic duties. 
>>Of course, there are many jobs anyone can work in, though most of these jobs only include the basic duties. 
Even in these field, friends networking can be beneficial for some people.
>>Even for people in this field, friends network can play a great role.
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