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What\'s the most crowded place you\'ve ever been to?

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I have been to Beijing of China. The most famous place in Beijing is Forbídden city. Forbídden city has a lot of tourist. When I went to there, there had a large number of tourist. I didn't walk but l feel moving. I only could see moving black circle.(Black circle was people's head.) China have a lot of people. So where ever you go there are a lot of people.

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Hi Eva,

Thank you for sharing your travel experience to Beijing. It must have been an interesting trip, especially with all the crowds at the Forbidden City. You're doing well in expressing your thoughts! Let¡¯s go over a few sentences for clarity.

~Teacher Cathy

 

I have been to Beijing of China.

>>I have been to Beijing, China.

The most famous place in Beijing is Forbidden city.

>>The most famous place in Beijing is the Forbidden City.

Forbidden city has a lot of tourist.

>>The Forbidden City has a lot of tourists.

When I went to there, there had a large number of tourist.

>>When I went there, there were a large number of tourists.

I didn't walk but l feel moving.

>>I didn¡¯t walk, but I felt like I was moving.

I only could see moving black circle. (Black circle was people's head.)

>>I could only see moving black circles, which were people¡¯s heads.

China have a lot of people.

>>China has a lot of people.

So where ever you go there are a lot of people.

>>So wherever you go, there are a lot of people.

 

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