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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good id

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2024-09-25 438

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There are also case where Korea has a job when it is a student.
Of course, they are short-term apprentices or part-time job, but most of them graduate from high school and have a job, but they do not have a job when they are students.
However, if you have a job when you are a student, it would be good because you can enter society memeber quickly.
And then, you can build a lot of experience because you are fast to enter society member.
However, unknowingly discrimination exists in Korea depending on the case of entering society after graduating from high school and after graduating from university.
In addition, serious accidents occur because there are many work environments that are not suitable for adolescents.
Therefore, I think having a job as a student should have a safe working environment while thinking about it even if it is a good idea, and I hope there is some age standard.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용


Hello, Yun!~
Yes, I think it's typical in your country for many students to want to work part-time jobs to help with their personal needs or desires. Although it's not very common in my country, I believe it's beneficial for young people to experience life outside the classroom, as it better prepares them for the real world and their responsibilities after graduation. ^_^
Chammy

There are also case where Korea has a job when it is a student.
>>There are also cases where Koreans get a job while still a student.
Of course, they are short-term apprentices or part-time job, but most of them graduate from high school and have a job, but they do not have a job when they are students.
>>Of course, they work as short-term apprentices or in part-time jobs. Most of them graduate from high school and then find employment, but they don't work while they are still students.
However, if you have a job when you are a student, it would be good because you can enter society memeber quickly.
>>However, if you have a job when you are a student, it would be good because you can enter society more quickly.
And then, you can build a lot of experience because you are fast to enter society member.
>> And then, you can build a lot of experience because you get involved in society at young age.
However, unknowingly discrimination exists in Korea depending on the case of entering society after graduating from high school and after graduating from university
>> However, unknowingly, discrimination exists in Korea based on entering society after high school or university.
In addition, serious accidents occur because there are many work environments that are not suitable for adolescents.
Therefore, I think having a job as a student should have a safe working environment while thinking about it even if it is a good idea, and I hope there is some age standard.
>> Correct
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