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1. Maybe how to select the movie is related to my personality.
When I meet the problem, I don¡¯t like to leave or avoid it.
I try to solve the problem by thinking why it came to me and how it will affect me.
This personality might affect to my movie choice.

2. I also like romantic movies too.
Actually I like this movie genre because my wife likes it.
Especially ¡°Love affair¡± that Warren Beaty and Annett Bening were casted is our best movie.
Love can change the standard of movie choice.

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Hi, David.

Thank you for your genuine answers. It was interesting to know how you explain your perspectives. Always remember to re-read your answers to be more conscious of how the flow of though was expressed. The ideas were there, but we can still improve the grammar and flow while keeping your ideas clear. Good work!

Best,
Teacher Dana

Maybe how to select the movie is related to my personality.
>>>Maybe how to select the movie is related to my personality.

When I meet the problem, I don¡¯t like to leave or avoid it.
>>>When I encounter a problem, I don¡¯t like to avoid it.

I try to solve the problem by thinking why it came to me and how it will affect me.
>>>I try to solve it by understanding why it happened and how it will affect me.

This personality might affect to my movie choice.
>>>This aspect of my personality might influence my movie choices.

I also like romantic movies too.
>>>I also enjoy romantic movies.

Actually I like this movie genre because my wife likes it.
>>>In fact, I like this genre because my wife enjoys it.

Especially ¡°Love affair¡± that Warren Beaty and Annett Bening were casted is our best movie.
>>>Our favorite movie is Love Affair, starring Warren Beatty and Annette Bening.

Love can change the standard of movie choice.
>>>Love can definitely influence how we choose movies.



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