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Trip alone

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2024-09-24 145

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I've never traveled alone yet. Of course, I have wandered around the city which is close to my home. the standard of "close" is time needed for movement. Seoul is really small city. So I can go everywhere in Seoul alone.
But out of Seoul, Cities including Busan, Daegu are difficult for me to visit alone. Because these cities take about 3 hours by bullet train called KTX(one way), and this transport is really expensive. Hence, it's better to trip for 2 days at least. If I come back home within the day, what a waste of money! And if I trip for 2 days at least, I have to reservate the accommodation, and it is really expensive, too. When I travel with my friends, we can devide our room charge. But I have to pay all costs by myself. So, costs are the main reason why I don't go trip alone. And safety is second reason. there can be a dangerous situation if an woman wander at late night. It's not a main case, of course. However my parents worry about this, and me either.

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Hello, Ms. Casey! They say that there is a different kind of liberation that one feels when traveling alone. I hope you get the chance and the courage to do and discover new things you have not yet found within you.
-T. Sonny
I've never traveled alone yet. 
>>Correct!
Of course, I have wandered around the city which is close to my home. 
>>Correct!
the standard of "close" is time needed for movement. 
>>The standard for a place to be 'close' is the required travel time.
Seoul is really small city. 
>>Seoul is certainly a small city.
So I can go everywhere in Seoul alone.
>>Correct!
But out of Seoul, Cities including Busan, Daegu are difficult for me to visit alone. 
>>But beyond Seoul are cities including Busan, and Daegu difficult for me to visit alone. 
Because these cities take about 3 hours by bullet train called KTX(one way), and this transport is really expensive. 
>>This is because it takes about 3 hours to reach these cities by a one-way bullet train called KTX, which transportation fee is also high-priced. 
Hence, it's better to trip for 2 days at least. 
>>Hence, it's better if you would have at least two days to spend.
If I come back home within the day, what a waste of money! 
>>If it's only for a day, it would be a waste of money!
And if I trip for 2 days at least, I have to reservate the accommodation, and it is really expensive, too. 
>>For trips that last for at least two days, I would need to reserve accommodation which costs a fortune, too.
When I travel with my friends, we can devide our room charge. 
>>When I travel with my friends, we usually divide the room charge.
But I have to pay all costs by myself. 
>>But, I have to pay for everything else myself.
So, costs are the main reason why I don't go trip alone. 
>>So, costs are the main reason why I don't go on trips alone. 
And safety is second reason. 
>>Safety comes next.
there can be a dangerous situation if an woman wander at late night. 
>>There are possible dangers if a woman wanders late at night.
It's not a main case, of course. 
>>Though, it is not very likely.
However my parents worry about this, and me either.
>>But, my parents worry about it and so do I.
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