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If my husband had daughter.
He would be generous to others.
His way of speaking might be mild and his acting could be more careful.
He tends to be conscious when people were gathering.
Because he is polite person so he is strict about behaving rude.
Most of all he won't be feel lonely during his menopause.

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Hi, Ms. Sunny!
I guess your husband would be that way. I think fathers are more careful if they have a daughter because they wanted other people to treat their daughters "special" or in a gentle way.
Great day ahead!
Aki~

If my husband had daughter. He would be generous to others. 
>>> If my husband had a daughter, he would be generous to others. 

His way of speaking might be mild and his acting could be more careful.
>>> CORRECT!

He tends to be conscious when people were gathering.
>>> He tends to be conscious when people are gathering.

Because he is polite person so he is strict about behaving rude.
>>> Because he is a polite person he is strict about behaving rude.
 
Most of all he won't be feel lonely during his menopause.
>>> Most of all he won't feel lonely during his andropause.

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