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Q: What makes manipulation of time amusing?
A: I think people can control the situation by themselves make it amusing.
If they can manipulate time, then they can actually control the overall situation, and they would always be in a satisfied results.
Also, if they can manipulate time, they can develop themselves faster than others.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some considerations:

1. I think people can control the situation by themselves make it amusing.
>>I think people being able to control the situation by themselves make it amusing.

2. If they can manipulate time, then they can actually control the overall situation, and they would always be in a satisfied results.
>>If they can manipulate time, then they can actually control the overall situation, and they will always be satisfied with the results.

3. Also, if they can manipulate time, they can develop themselves faster than others.
>>CORRECT!


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