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Homework 0919

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How has your hometown changed since you were a child?

I grow up in a rural.
There was a stream.
I and my brother could travel there.
We have good memories.
However, These memories can exist only by itself.
My home town is changing untill now.
Many buildings were created and Wide roads were constructed.
I cannot find my young ways anymore.
But, It¡¯s not being a city.
It¡¯s poor to me, because I like the national side of my hometown.

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Hi, Stella! I can tell from your writing that you have many fond memories of your hometown. ^^ Thank you for always doing your homework. Take care and have a great day!
~T. Jewel
I grew up in a rural area.
>>I grew up in a rural area.
There was a stream.
>>CORRECT
I and my brother could travel there.
>>My brother and I could travel there.
We have good memories.
>>We had good memories.
However, These memories can exist only by itself.
>>However, these memories can exist only by themselves.
My home town is changing untill now.
>>My hometown has been changing until now.
Many buildings were created and Wide roads were constructed.
>>Many buildings have been constructed, and wide roads have been built.
I cannot find my young ways anymore.
>>I can no longer find my youthful ways.
But, It¡¯s not being a city.
>>But it¡¯s not about becoming a city.
It¡¯s poor to me, because I like the national side of my hometown.
>>It¡¯s disappointing to me because I like the traditional side of my hometown.
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