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Even if I don't have any special plans, Chuseok makes me feel good and look forward to it. The most important thing is that I can spend more time with my mother and sisters, whom I don't meet often.
For me, being with a living family for a long time is celebration.
My mother will definitely prepare galbi stew and kimchi deliciously, and my wife will prepare sikhye(Korean traditional drink) and japchae. It is a food that they always prepare every holiday.
And to be able to make a video call with my two daughters in the U.S. when we are together is a great pleasure for me.

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Hi, David.

I hope this finds you well. Great job answering the homework assigned. You were able to answer them properly, but there are still constructions you can improve on. Overall, good job expressing yourself well.

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Teacher Dana




Even if I don't have any special plans, Chuseok makes me feel good and look forward to it.

>>>Even if I don't have any special plans, Chuseok still makes me feel good and gives me something to look forward to.


The most important thing is that I can spend more time with my mother and sisters, whom I don't meet often.

>>>The most important thing is that I can spend more time with my mother and sisters, whom I don't see often.



For me, being with a living family for a long time is celebration.

>>>For me, spending time with family is a celebration.



My mother will definitely prepare galbi stew and kimchi deliciously, and my wife will prepare sikhye(Korean traditional drink) and japchae. It is a food that they always prepare every holiday.

>>>My mother will definitely prepare galbi stew and kimchi, and my wife will make sikhye (a traditional Korean drink) and japchae. These are dishes they always prepare for every holiday.



And to be able to make a video call with my two daughters in the U.S. when we are together is a great pleasure for me.

>>>Being able to make a video call with my two daughters in the U.S. while My family in Korea and I are together brings me great joy.

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