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What challenges do people with disability face?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-09-13 816

회원님의 영작문

I think people with disabilities face challenges at every moment.
It is difficult for disabled people who use wheelchairs to go anywhere.
This is because it is difficult to use public transportation and the wheelchair is too narrow to enter the store or restaurant, or the owner is reluctant to enter the wheelchair.
They also have to fight people's discrimination and prejudice.
This is because someone can have discrimination against disabled people and create uncomfortable conflicts because they have contradictory prejudices.
Even if you consider the disabled too much, it may be uncomfortable, so I think some kind of appropriate consideration is needed.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!~
Thank you for sharing your point of view. People who are disabled experience trouble when others show sympathy for them. But I've come to understand that nowadays, that sort of trait was lifted to empower them rather than pity them, as they say, a disability doesn't mean a person couldn't accomplish what a normal person can, it was simply more difficult for them to accomplish certain tasks.
Chammy
I think people with disabilities face challenges at every moment.
Or
>>I believe that people with impairments encounter barriers at all times.
It is difficult for disabled people who use wheelchairs to go anywhere.
This is because it is difficult to use public transportation and the wheelchair is too narrow to enter the store or restaurant, or the owner is reluctant to enter the wheelchair.
>>This is due to the wheelchair's difficulty being used on public transportation, its wide width making it impossible to fit inside a store or restaurant, and the owner's reluctance to let it inside.
They also have to fight people's discrimination and prejudice.
Or
>> They must also overcome the difficulty of dealing with thoughtless people.
This is because someone can have discrimination against disabled people and create uncomfortable conflicts because they have contradictory prejudices.
>> This is because someone can discriminate against disabled people and create uncomfortable conflicts because they have contradictory prejudices.
Even if you consider the disabled too much, it may be uncomfortable, so I think some kind of appropriate consideration is needed.
OR
>>It would be uncomfortable to give the disabled too much thought, but I believe that some proper consideration is necessary.
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