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I often frown between my eyebrows when I concentrate and study.
I try to relax my eyes and smile because it creates wrinkles between my eyebrows and looks like an angry person.
People who don't know me well sometimes mistake me for being in a bad mood when they see it. It may make people uncomfortable. However, it happens unconsciously and when I become conscious, I try to fix it.

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Chammy
I often frown between my eyebrows when I concentrate and study.
OR
>> When I am concentrating on my studies, I often scowl between my eyebrows.
I try to relax my eyes and smile because it creates wrinkles between my eyebrows and looks like an angry person.
OR
>>I try to relax my eyes and smile to avoid creating wrinkles between my eyebrows, which can make me appear angry.
People who don't know me well sometimes mistake me for being in a bad mood when they see it.
 It may make people uncomfortable. However, it happens unconsciously and when I become conscious, I try to fix it.
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