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Do you think you chose the right career path? Why or why not?

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When I was a elementary school student, my teacher took care of my class students doing her best.
It was so impressed that I want to be like her.
When It times to select the university's major, I collect only the department of education.
Among of these, I should go to the department of early childhood education.
But, when I have studied of this major, I though that it was not right for me.
Because early childhood teacher needs enormous power and kindness but I don't have confidence of that.
So I collect second major of english literature and two of the department of education.
I think that I don't say 'It is a really perfect path of me' just now.
But, I want to say 'It is a good choice for me ' in the future.

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Wow! That was impressive Nicole :)
Great job with your composition. Continue doing well!
~ T. Demi ^^

When I was a elementary school student, my teacher took care of my class students doing her best.
>> When I was an elementary school student, my teacher did her best to care for my classmates.
It was so impressed that I want to be like her.
>> I was so impressed that I wanted to be like her.
When It times to select the university's major, I collect only the department of education.
>> When it was time to select my major, I only collected from the Department of Education.
Among of these, I should go to the department of early childhood education.
>> Among these, I chose the Department of Early Childhood Education.
But, when I have studied of this major, I though that it was not right for me.
>> But when I studied this major, I thought that it was not right for me.
Because early childhood teacher needs enormous power and kindness but I don't have confidence of that.
>> An Early Childhood teacher needs enormous power and kindness but I am not confident.
So I collect second major of english literature and two of the department of education.
>>So I chose my second major which is English Literature.
I think that I don't say 'It is a really perfect path of me' just now.
>> I can't say that it's the perfect path for me yet.
But, I want to say 'It is a good choice for me ' in the future.
>> But I want to say that it's a good choice for my future.
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