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I want to live in our country.Because our country has so many advantages that it's safe and fast Wi-Fi.

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Nicely done, Shin Woo! Your written sentences have been improving. Please focus on the other areas that needs more practice. Try to add more sentences next time for better expression of your thoughts. See you in class!
- Teacher Angela


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