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A recent activity that I enjoyed

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The activity that I enjoy these days is exercise at the gym.
My goal for exercise was losing my weight.
But now I am enjoying the exercise itself because I feel refreshing after exercise.
If I skip it because of dinner meeting, I might go to the gym early in the morning for exercise.

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Hi, David.

Great job on your homework! I love how you¡¯ve found enjoyment in exercising beyond just your original goal. It¡¯s awesome that you¡¯re making time for it even when life gets busy. Keep up the positive energy!

Best,
Teacher Dana


The activity that I enjoy these days is exercise at the gym.
>>>
The activity I enjoy these days is exercising at the gym.

My goal for exercise was losing my weight.
>>>My initial goal for exercising was to lose weight.

But now I am enjoying the exercise itself because I feel refreshing after exercise.
>>> But now, I enjoy the exercise itself because I feel refreshed afterward.

If I skip it because of dinner meeting, I might go to the gym early in the morning for exercise.
>>>If I skip it because of a dinner meeting, I might go to the gym early in the morning to make up for it.
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