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The things I want to tell you

작성자: 이*연
2024-09-10 54

회원님의 영작문

Two month ago, I was accused by part timer
On July 10th, I gave the payment to her based of the time table. But something is different from her calculation.
Right away. She spoke hotly.
Of course if it is wrong. I have to follow and I never say no
But at that time my husband was really angry about that.
If she works diligently and actively, Absolutely my husband seemed to be very sorry for her. Because of the wrong part.
I think we need technics when we talk to others
It was really tiny things but that night
My husband revealed his mind with a rage.
The content was so simple.
After I said to my wife. I will treat some problem tomorrow.
And she asked some more thoughts to my husband.
In one of the rules,if one worker works 15 hours more in a week. We should give one day payment more. If the worker works for 5days, the worker can be given for 6days payments
Of course we gave some more payment.
From at first, our payment isn’t correct.
Then weekly holiday allowance is wrong

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Gina!^^
Thank you for writing this. Once again, I'm really sorry to hear about the issues you faced. It sounds like a frustrating situation, but I hope things have improved since then.
~Kelly^^
Two month ago, I was accused by part timer
>> Two months ago, I was accused by a part-timer
On July 10th, I gave the payment to her based of the time table.
>> On July 10th, I gave her the payment based on the timetable.
But something is different from her calculation.
>> Correct
OR:
>> However, there was a discrepancy with her calculation.
Right away. She spoke hotly.
>> Immediately, she spoke angrily.
Of course if it is wrong. I have to follow and I never say no
>> Of course, if it is wrong, I need to correct it and never refuse.
But at that time my husband was really angry about that.
>> Correct
OR:
>> However, at that time, my husband was very upset about it
If she works diligently and actively, Absolutely my husband seemed to be very sorry for her. Because of the wrong part.
>> If she had worked diligently and actively, my husband would have felt very sorry for her. Due to the mistake.
I think we need technics when we talk to others
>> I think we need to use proper techniques when communicating with others.
It was really tiny things but that night My husband revealed his mind with a rage.
>> It was a really minor issue, but that night, my husband expressed his frustration with anger.
The content was so simple.
>> Correct
OR:
>> the issue was simple.
After I said to my wife. I will treat some problem tomorrow.
>> After I told my wife that I would address the issue the next day.
And she asked some more thoughts to my husband.
>> She then asked my husband for his thoughts on the matter.
In one of the rules,if one worker works 15 hours more in a week. We should give one day payment more. If the worker works for 5days, the worker can be given for 6days payments
>> According to the rules, if a worker works 15 hours more in a week, we should provide an additional day's payment.
Of course we gave some more payment.
>> Correct
OR:
>> We did provide additional payment.
From at first, our payment isn’t correct.
>> Initially, our payment was incorrect.
Then weekly holiday allowance is wrong
>> Then, the weekly holiday allowance was incorrect.
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