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Only using app can be limited learning English.
Language is conversation between people.
App helps us to enhance our English.
But if we wanted to persist learning English
We need real people who can talk with .
Some times they have me study more english and caused by competition about learning it.

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Good morning, Ms. Sunny!
Do you know what the App lacks? Emotion.
Yes, they can provide the information that you need however, the sincerity is not there.
Have a good day!
Aki

Only using app can be limited learning English.
>>>  Using only apps can be limited to learning English.

Language is conversation between people.
>>> Language is a conversation between people.
 
App helps us to enhance our English.
>>>  The app helps us to enhance our English.

But if we wanted to persist learning English.
>>> But if we wanted to persist in learning English

We need real people who can talk with .
>>> We need real people to talk with.
>>> We need real people whom we can talk with.

Some times they have me study more english and caused by competition about learning it.
>> Sometimes they let me study more English because of the competition about it.
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