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Do you think it is more important to make a lot of money or to enjoy your job?

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I think it's more important to enjoy your job.
Think about it, if you make a lot of money but your job isn't enjoyable, isn't it a pain for yourself?
Also, if that's the case, you'll quit your job soon.
Of course, if you make a lot of money, you may be happy to have a lot of things to enjoy, but spending money and going to work are different things.
If you enjoy your job, you wll be happy to go to work, and I think you can start your day happily.
That's why I think it's more important to enjoy your job than to make a lot of money.

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Hello, Yun!
I agree with your point of view entirely! I didn't give much attention to what I would do after graduating from college, but, I soon came to understand how crucial it is to love and appreciate the work that provides your income. Since the way we feel about our jobs affects our health, I've come to the conclusion that having a peaceful workplace is crucial to a happy and healthy existence.
Chammy 
I think it's more important to enjoy your job.
Think about it, if you make a lot of money but your job isn't enjoyable, isn't it a pain for yourself?
Also, if that's the case, you'll quit your job soon.
Of course, if you make a lot of money, you may be happy to have a lot of things to enjoy, but spending money and going to work are different things.
>>Correct
If you enjoy your job, you wll be happy to go to work, and I think you can start your day happily.
>>If you enjoy your job, you will be happy to go to work, and I think you can start your day happily.
That's why I think it's more important to enjoy your job than to make a lot of money.
>>Correct
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