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Would you rather have more time or more money?

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HAHAHA, of course, I think it's better to have more money. Mnay people prefer money to time.
But these days, it's better to have more time.
Because time is given fairly to people and if it passes by, it cannot come back.
Even if you lose money, you can earn it again, right? It could be a lot again.
If I have a lot of time, I can feel relaxed, do fun things during that time, make memories, or develop my abilities.
Therefore, I think it is better to have more time to feel the preciousness of the given time.

P.S. Have a nice weekend! and Happy birthday! I sincerely hope you have a great birthday! Thank you always.

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Hello, Yun!
Thank you for your greetings! I appreciate you remembering it :) Let's enjoy a wonderful weekend.  ^____^
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HAHAHA, of course, I think it's better to have more money.
>> Correct
 Mnay people prefer money to time.
>>  Many people prefer money to time.
But these days, it's better to have more time.
Because time is given fairly to people and if it passes by, it cannot come back.
Even if you lose money, you can earn it again, right? It could be a lot again.
If I have a lot of time, I can feel relaxed, do fun things during that time, make memories, or develop my abilities.
>>Correct
Therefore, I think it is better to have more time to feel the preciousness of the given time.
OR
>>As a result, I believe it is preferable to have more time in order to appreciate how valuable the time we have.
P.S. Have a nice weekend! and Happy birthday! I sincerely hope you have a great birthday! Thank you always.
>> Correct
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