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The positive side of \"Should the federal minimum wage be increased?\"

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2024-09-05 531

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Hello, I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Should the federal minimum wage be increased?". I think a federal minimum wage should be increased.
First, an employee can get a economical satisfaction by receiving higher federal minimum wage. Fundamentally, humans create a driving force to work harder when their economic benefits rise. It has to do with their economical satisfaction.
Second, the increase in the federal minimum wage facilitates the provision of food, clothing, and shelter for employees. For example, part-timers in Korea, are mostly students in their 20s who have now entered college. Seoul, South Korea, is experiencing inflation due to the centralization of the Seoul metropolitan area, and young part-timers are facing the real problem of having to work to earn living expenses.Therefore, a rise in the minimum wage is essential for them.
In conclusion, the federal minimum wage should be increased because it helps a lot in terms of the economy.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Hana! Thank you for doing your best in this topic. I know it's a bit advanced for you but you managed to express an opinion on it. I appreciate your efforts every time. See you!
--Teacher Anji


Hello, I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Should the federal minimum wage be increased?".  I think a federal minimum wage should be increased.
Hello, I'm Hana, and I'd like to present my opinion on the topic, "Should the federal minimum wage be increased?" I think the federal minimum wage should be increased.
First, an employee can get a economical satisfaction by receiving higher federal minimum wage. Fundamentally, humans create a driving force to work harder when their economic benefits rise. It has to do with their economical satisfaction.
First, an employee can achieve economic satisfaction by receiving a higher federal minimum wage. Fundamentally, humans are motivated to work harder when their economic benefits rise. This is related to their economic satisfaction.
Second, the increase in the federal minimum wage facilitates the provision of food, clothing, and shelter for employees.
Second, the increase in the federal minimum wage facilitates the provision of food, clothing, and shelter for employees.
 For example, part-timers in Korea, are mostly students in their 20s who have now entered college. 
 For example, part-timers in Korea are mostly students in their 20s who have recently entered college. 
Seoul, South Korea, is experiencing inflation due to the centralization of the Seoul metropolitan area, and young part-timers are facing the real problem of having to work to earn living expenses.
Seoul, South Korea, is experiencing inflation due to the centralization of the Seoul metropolitan area, and young part-timers are facing the real problem of having to work to earn living expenses. 
Therefore, a rise in the minimum wage is essential for them.
>> CORRECT
In conclusion, the federal minimum wage should be increased because it helps a lot in terms of the economy.
In conclusion, the federal minimum wage should be increased because it significantly helps in terms of the economy.
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