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What are your short term and long term goals?

작성자: 김*린
2024-09-05 843

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My short term goal is to enter the company. These days I send resume to chemical company for QC job. I wanna get some job until this year so I got a bit anxious. My parents said that I don't have to be urgent, but I can't help myself. Therefore I think I have to be more productive.
And my long term goal is the power that I can alive myself and do whatever I want. It doesn't mean just only money. I mean I want some wisdom to live and look positive side of life. Thus I sometimes write a letter to myself and read a book regard to wisdom. I have to find the way how I can live happy and peaceful.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Lin! It's great that you have clear short-term and long-term goals. It's normal to feel anxious when searching for a job, but remember that taking small, consistent steps will lead you closer to your goal. Your parents' advice to not be urgent can be a reminder to pace yourself and stay focused. Your long-term goal of finding wisdom and positivity in life is inspiring, and writing letters to yourself and reading books on wisdom are excellent practices. Keep balancing your job search with these meaningful activities, and you'll find your path to both success and peace.
~T. Jenna

My short term goal is to enter the company. 
>>My short-term goal is to enter a company.
OR
>>My short-term goal is to secure a position in a company.
These days, I send resume to chemical company for QC job. 
>>These days, I am sending my resume to chemical companies for QC jobs.
OR
>>Recently, I've been submitting my resume to chemical companies for QC positions.
I wanna get some job until this year so I got a bit anxious. 
>>I want to get a job by the end of this year, so I’ve been feeling a bit anxious.
OR
>>I’m aiming to land a job by the end of the year, so I've been feeling a bit anxious.
My parents said that I don't have to be urgent, but I can't help myself. 
>>My parents said I don't need to rush, but I can't help feeling this way.
OR
>>My parents said that it’s not urgent for me to have a job, but I find it hard to stay calm.
Therefore, I think I have to be more productive.
Correct, or
>>Consequently, I feel it’s essential to significantly boost my productivity.
And my long term goal is the power that I can alive myself and do whatever I want.
>>In terms of my long-term goal, it is to gain the power or ability to support myself and do / pursue whatever I want.
OR
>>In terms of my long-term goal, it is to gain the independence and capability to support myself and pursue my passions.
 It doesn't mean just only money. 
Correct, or
>>This goes beyond mere financial gain.
I mean I want some wisdom to live and look positive side of life. 
>>I mean I want to gain wisdom to live well and maintain a positive outlook on life.
Thus, I sometimes write a letter to myself and read a book regard to wisdom. 
>>Thus, I sometimes write letters to myself and read books on wisdom.
I have to find the way how I can live happy and peaceful.
>>I have to find a way to live happily and peacefully.
OR
>>I have to find out how I can live happily and peacefully.
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