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Why do you think mountains are important for the environment and for people living nearby?

작성자: 박*호
2024-09-05 2114

회원님의 영작문

Although mountains are not suitable places for humans to live, I think they are indispensable to humans.
Unlike in the past, today urbanization is progressing around the world, and the role of mountains full of forests is increasing.
First, mountains provide a resting place for humans.
People relieve stress from everyday life by going to the mountains to relax.
Just looking at the beautiful scenery from the mountains is comforting to humans.
And climbing a mountain is also very good for people's health.
So there are many people who climb the mountain regularly.
And the trees that fill the mountains supply humans with the oxygen they need and clean the polluted air in the city.
I think mountains are very precious to humans in many ways.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Thursday, Sun! 

Mountains act as natural barriers, influencing weather patterns and protecting areas from severe weather events like cyclones. Additionally, mountain forests and vegetation stabilise the soil, preventing landslides and soil erosion, which can be devastating to regions downstream.

- Kristine ^^ 

Although mountains are not suitable places for humans to live, I think they are indispensable to humans.
>> Even though mountains are unsuitable for human habitation, I believe that mountains are essential to humankind.
Unlike in the past, today urbanization is progressing around the world, and the role of mountains full of forests is increasing.
>> Unlike in the past, urbanization is spreading around the world now, and mountains covered in forests are becoming ever more important.
First, mountains provide a resting place for humans.
>> First, mountains give people a place to rest.
People relieve stress from everyday life by going to the mountains to relax.
>> People go to the mountains to unwind in order to relieve stress from their daily lives.
Just looking at the beautiful scenery from the mountains is comforting to humans.
>> People find consolation in simply taking in the breathtaking view from the mountains.
And climbing a mountain is also very good for people's health.
>> Additionally, climbing mountains is highly beneficial to one's health.
So there are many people who climb the mountain regularly.
>> Therefore, many people regularly climb the mountains.
And the trees that fill the mountains supply humans with the oxygen they need and clean the polluted air in the city.
>> In addition, the trees that cover the mountains provide people with the oxygen they require and cleanse the contaminated air in the city.
I think mountains are very precious to humans in many ways.
>> In my opinion, mountains are really valuable to people in many ways.
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