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What do you think about children crying in a restaurant when you are trying to eat?

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When children crying in the restaurant, l am so embassing. When our children was young, I did't go big restaurant. Why chidren crying, fist chidren is not confortable something, second unfamiliar place and feel hunger or sleep. When we go to restaurant we need to take care children's conditions. What I recommend is don't go there. Chidren likes place to play confortable.

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Hi Eva!

Thanks for doing your homework! You¡¯ve made some great points about how children¡¯s behavior can affect others in restaurants. It¡¯s true that children might cry if they¡¯re uncomfortable or in a new place. Keep up the good work, and don¡¯t be afraid to add more details to your writing. You¡¯re on the right track!

~Teacher Cathy

 

When children crying in the restaurant, l am so embassing.

>>I feel so embarassed when children cry in the restaurant.

When our children was young, I did't go big restaurant.

>>When my children were young, we didn't go to big restaurants.

Why chidren crying, fist chidren is not confortable something, second unfamiliar place and feel hunger or sleep.

>>When children cry, it might be because they're not comfortable, it's an unfamiliar place for them, or they feel hungry or sleepy.

When we go to restaurant we need to take care children's conditions.

>>When we go to a restaurant, we need to take care of our children's conditions.

What I recommend is don't go there.

>>I recommend them not to go there.

Chidren likes place to play confortable.

>>Children like places where they can play comfortably.

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