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In my view, the advantages of economic development can outweigh the disadvantages if there is a balanced approach. This means implementing policies that promote sustainable growth while preserving social values and protecting the environment. It¡¯s crucial for nations to find this balance to ensure that economic progress does not come at the expense of cultural and environmental integrity.

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This is a thought-provoking question with valid points on both sides.
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OR>> This is a thought-provoking question with compelling arguments on both sides.
The advantages of economic development, such as improved living standards and poverty reduction, are significant and can lead to a more prosperous society. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, the loss of social values and environmental degradation are serious concerns which cannot be ignored.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
In my view, the advantages of economic development can outweigh the disadvantages if there is a balanced approach. 
>>> In my [point of/ perspective] view, the advantages of economic development can outweigh the disadvantages if there is a balanced approach. 
This means implementing policies that promote sustainable growth while preserving social values and protecting the environment.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 It¡¯s crucial for nations to find this balance to ensure that economic progress does not come at the expense of cultural and environmental integrity.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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