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Nowadays, most countries improve their living standards through economic development. However, some

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This is a thought-provoking question with valid points on both sides.
The advantages of economic development, such as improved living standards and poverty reduction, are significant and can lead to a more prosperous society. However, the loss of social values and environmental degradation are serious concerns that cannot be ignored.
In my view, the advantages of economic development can outweigh the disadvantages if there is a balanced approach. This means implementing policies that promote sustainable growth while preserving social values and protecting the environment. It¡¯s crucial for nations to find this balance to ensure that economic progress does not come at the expense of cultural and environmental integrity.

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Good day to you Ms. Dongeun!

I¡¯m truly impressed by your unwavering passion and dedication to completing your written assignments. Your commitment is inspiring! Keep honing your vocabulary skills—you¡¯re doing great, and I¡¯m excited to see how you continue to develop.

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This is a thought-provoking question with valid points on both sides.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>> This is a thought-provoking question with compelling arguments on both sides.
The advantages of economic development, such as improved living standards and poverty reduction, are significant and can lead to a more prosperous society. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, the loss of social values and environmental degradation are serious concerns which cannot be ignored.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
In my view, the advantages of economic development can outweigh the disadvantages if there is a balanced approach. 
>>> In my [point of/ perspective] view, the advantages of economic development can outweigh the disadvantages if there is a balanced approach. 
This means implementing policies that promote sustainable growth while preserving social values and protecting the environment.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 It¡¯s crucial for nations to find this balance to ensure that economic progress does not come at the expense of cultural and environmental integrity.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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