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In what ways have modern laundry appliances improved user convenience and efficiency?

작성자: 박*호
2024-09-02 738

회원님의 영작문

There is a famous saying that modern home appliances have liberated women from their homes.
In the past, it was women's responsibility to cook meals, prepare side dishes, clean the house, and do laundry.
And in the past, women had to do these things by hand without the help of electronic devices, which took a huge amount of time.
So women did not have time to go out of the house.
However, now various home appliances are helping women with household chores.
The electric rice cooker cooks rice and the refrigerator keeps food fresh. Vacuum cleaners clean houses on behalf of women.
Likewise, washing machines save women the trouble of doing laundry.
Even recently, a drying function has been added to washing machines, so there is no need to hang laundry on a hanger to dry.
I think modern home appliances, including washing machines, have made women happier.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you so much, Sun! 

Modern washing machines come equipped with energy-saving features such as programmable settings, shorter wash cycles, and advanced motor technology. These innovations not only reduce energy consumption but also contribute to lower utility bills and environmental sustainability.

- Kristine ^^ 

There is a famous saying that modern home appliances have liberated women from their homes.
>> Correct.
In the past, it was women's responsibility to cook meals, prepare side dishes, clean the house, and do laundry.
>> Traditionally, women were in charge of dinner preparation, housecleaning, laundry, and side dish preparation.
And in the past, women had to do these things by hand without the help of electronic devices, which took a huge amount of time.
>> Additionally, women used to have to complete these tasks by hand without the aid of electronics, which took a very long time.
So women did not have time to go out of the house.
>> Women thus didn't have time to leave the house.
However, now various home appliances are helping women with household chores.
>> However, a variety of appliances at home are assisting women from housework.
The electric rice cooker cooks rice and the refrigerator keeps food fresh. 
>> Rice is cooked in the electric rice cooker, and food keeps fresh in the refrigerator.
Vacuum cleaners clean houses on behalf of women.
>> Women clean houses with vacuum cleaners.
Likewise, washing machines save women the trouble of doing laundry.
>> Likewise, women can avoid the hassle of doing laundry by using washing machines.
Even recently, a drying function has been added to washing machines, so there is no need to hang laundry on a hanger to dry.
>> Laundry no longer has to be hung on a hanger to dry due to the addition of a drying feature to washing machines lately.
I think modern home appliances, including washing machines, have made women happier.
>> I believe that women are happy because of modern home appliances such as washing machines.

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