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When are you most productive?

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I'm pretty productive when I do my hobbies like playing a piano, drawing pictures, reading a book, going swimming. Because I produce some new things, ideas whenever I do that. But the most productive day is that I do some good things for others. When I affect someone for a good way that make it feel more happy or helpful for, I feel full filled and be well worth. So that's why I like to help people and think that is productive to me.

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Hi, Lin! That¡¯s great to hear! It¡¯s wonderful that you find such joy and fulfillment in both your hobbies and helping others. Balancing personal interests with acts of kindness can be incredibly rewarding and productive. Keep up the fantastic work!
~T. Jenna

I'm pretty productive when I do my hobbies like playing a piano, drawing pictures, reading a book, going swimming. 
Correct, or
>>I'm most productive when I'm immersed in my hobbies, like playing the piano, drawing, reading a book, or going for a swim.
Because I produce some new things, ideas whenever I do that. 
>>It's because I produce / come up with new ideas and things whenever I do those.
But the most productive day is that I do some good things for others. 
>>But, my most productive days are when I do good things for others.
OR
>>However, I find my most productive days are those in which I contribute positively to others.
When I affect someone for a good way that make it feel more happy or helpful for, I feel full filled and be well worth. 
>>When I positively impact someone, making them feel happier or more helped, I feel fulfilled and that my efforts are worthwhile.
So that's why I like to help people and think that is productive to me.
>>That's why I like to help people and think that is productive to me.
OR
>>That¡¯s why I enjoy / relish helping people and consider it productive for me.
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