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Our government gives a lot of benefit to people who wants to learn for having a job or hobby.
I am satisfied with that .
And they support much money to people who is poor.
But not all people are real poor.
They are abuse the policies.
Government often change the housing policy to impos the tax .
I predict the middle class will disappear because of the tax.
So they have to distinguish who is poor or not.

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Ms. Sunny!
You have a very good point here. Your government has a very good way of helping people but according to the view of others, they are just "band-aids" meaning it is temporary. They wanted to see policies that would solve an issue, but it would not be possible since there are politicians who always look after their interests!
Have a great day!
T. Aki~

Our government gives a lot of benefit to people who wants to learn for having a job or hobby.
>>> Our government provides benefits for the citizen who wants to learn something for a living or as part of their hobbies.

I am satisfied with that.
>>>  CORRECT! 

And they support much money to people who is poor.
>>> And they support poor people with cash aid or subsidies.

But not all people are real poor.
>>> But not all beneficiaries are really poor.

They are abuse the policies.
>>  They tend to abuse these policies.

Government often change the housing policy to impos the tax .
>>> The government often changes the housing policy to impose taxes.

I predict the middle class will disappear because of the tax.
>>>  CORRECT!

So they have to distinguish who is poor or not.
>>>  CORRECT!
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