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I am most afraid of pancreatic cancer and dementia,perhaps because I saw my father's suffering and death and I have seen my mom suffering from dementia. Pancreatic cancer,like my father's case,is difficult to detect and operate,so it has the highest mortality rate. That's why I am frightened with the cancer and I have tried to make much effort to avoid developing the cancer. And I think that dementia is the terrible thing because it is distressing for the patients not to notice their family and to forget their good memories.

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Hello, Gi Yean!
I agree! In all cases of cancer, people will agree that it is indeed scary. I think another scary part about the diseases you've mentioned is the fact that they are hereditary. So having a family history of these requires us to be extra careful compared to those without a history.
- T. Caitlyn
I am most afraid of pancreatic cancer and dementia,perhaps because I saw my father's suffering and death and I have seen my mom suffering from dementia. 
>> CORRECT
Pancreatic cancer,like my father's case,is difficult to detect and operate,so it has the highest mortality rate. 
>> Pancreatic cancer, like in my father's case, is difficult to detect and operate on, so it has the highest mortality rate.
That's why I am frightened with the cancer and I have tried to make much effort to avoid developing the cancer. 
>> That's why I am frightened of the cancer, and I put a lot of effort to avoid developing it.
And I think that dementia is the terrible thing because it is distressing for the patients not to notice their family and to forget their good memories.
>> And I think that dementia is a terrible thing because it is distressing for patients not to recognize their family and to forget their good memories.
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