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What are your favorite kinds of programs or shows?

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I like reality programs. Reality programs show us what ordinary people their lives. I can feel empathy. Their lives are similer with us, and their story touched us deeply. Sometime have much fun than comedy. Before we didn't have like this programs. Lately there are more and more reality programs with ordnerly as main characters.

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Hi Eva, 

Thank you for doing your homework. I can see that you enjoy the way these shows connect with everyday life and the real stories of ordinary people. It's great that you find empathy and sometimes even more entertainment in these programs than in comedies. Your reflections show a good understanding of why these types of programs are becoming more popular. 

Regarding your English, you're doing well in expressing your ideas clearly. One thing you could work on is sentence structure, like making sure each sentence flows smoothly into the next. For example, instead of "Sometime have much fun than comedy," you could say, "Sometimes, they are even more fun than comedies." Keep practicing, and you'll keep improving! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

I like reality programs.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I like to watch reality programs. 

Reality programs show us what ordinary people their lives.  

>>Reality programs show us what ordinary people¡¯s lives are like. 

I can feel empathy.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I can empathize with them. 

Their lives are similer with us, and their story touched us deeply.  

>>Their lives are similar to ours, and their stories touch us deeply. 

Sometime have much fun than comedy.  

>>Sometimes they are more entertaining than comedies. 

Before we didn't have like this programs.  

>>Before, we didn¡¯t have programs like this. 

Lately there are more and more reality programs with ordnerly as main characters. 

>>Lately, there are more and more reality programs with ordinary people as the main characters. 

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