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I think the technology of smart watch get improved for replace the smartphone.
The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight is.
So I guess there will be demand to possess more portable smartphone.

Now people can buy merchandise who have a smart watch of Galaxy series.
So I guess the smart watch can replace smartphone.

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Hello, Min!

The smart watch already has features that the smartphone has but not totally. As time goes by, I agree that more and more Apps as well as functions will be present in the smart watch technology. 

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I think the technology of smart watch get improved for replace the smartphone.
>> I think the technology of smart watch gets improved to replace the smartphone.

The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight is.
>> Correct!
Or: The bigger the camera of smartphone is, the heavier the weight becomes.

So I guess there will be demand to possess more portable smartphone.
>> Correct!

Now people can buy merchandise who have a smart watch of Galaxy series.
>> Correct!

So I guess the smart watch can replace smartphone.
>> Correct!
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