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I want to learn playing badmintom in the future.
As you know, Olympic in Paris was finished last week.
There were so many interesting games, but one of my favorite was badminton.
It looks so active and fun.
Also the korean girl named An was so insane.
She was so nice and ended up getting gold medal.
So I make a decision to learn badminton someday.

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Great work, Sky! Focus on expanding your vocabulary and varying sentence lengths in your writing.
- Teacher Angela



I want to learn playing badmintom in the future.
>> I want to learn to play badminton in the future.

As you know, Olympic in Paris was finished last week.
>> As you know, the Olympics in Paris finished last week.

There were so many interesting games, but one of my favorite was badminton.
>> CORRECT

It looks so active and fun.
>> It looks so active and fun.

Also the korean girl named An was so insane.
>> Also, the Korean girl named An was incredible.

She was so nice and ended up getting gold medal.
>> She was amazing and ended up winning the gold medal.

So I make a decision to learn badminton someday.
>> So I¡¯ve decided to learn badminton someday.
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