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What¡¯s your favorite weather? Why do you like that weather?

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I favorite weather is different at time. In spring l like sunny day. In spring sunny day feel like happy. In summer l like rainy day. Hot day of rain is very fresh, and cool. In fall l like sunny day. My country have beatiful maple leaf. In sunny day maple leaves are more beautiful. In winter l like snowy day. I just looking snow, I feel very magical. But I don't like a smooth road after snow.

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Hi Eva, 

Thank you for sharing your thoughts on your favorite weather. It's wonderful how you appreciate the different types of weather in each season. I love how you describe the happiness you feel on sunny spring days, the freshness of summer rain, the beauty of autumn leaves, and the magic of winter snow. Each season has its own charm, and it's clear that you find joy in the unique experiences that different weather brings. It's also practical that you mention the challenges of winter, like slippery roads. Your reflections show a deep connection to the natural world around you. Your English is coming along nicely! You're expressing your ideas clearly, and it's great to see how you're using a variety of words to describe different weather and how it makes you feel. There are a few small areas where your sentences could be smoother, but overall, you're doing a great job. Keep practicing, and you'll continue to improve! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

I favorite weather is different at time.  

>>My favorite weather changes depending on the time of year. 

In spring l like sunny day.  

>>In spring, I like sunny days. 

In spring sunny day feel like happy.  

>>A sunny day in spring feels happy. 

In summer l like rainy day.  

>>In summer, I like rainy days. 

Hot day of rain is very fresh, and cool.  

>>Rain on a hot day feels refreshing and cool. 

In fall l like sunny day.  

>>In the fall, I like sunny days. 

My country have beatiful maple leaf.  

>>My country has beautiful maple leaves. 

In sunny day maple leaves are more beautiful.  

>>On sunny days, the maple leaves are even more beautiful. 

In winter l like snowy day.  

>>In winter, I like snowy days. 

I just looking snow, I feel very magical.  

>>Just looking at the snow makes me feel very magical. 

But I don't like a smooth road after snow. 

>>But I don¡¯t like how the roads become slippery after it snows. 

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