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Essay:Although parents are responsible for raising a child, outside influence plays a key role in th

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I agree that parents undeniably hold a fundamental role in raising a child. From birth , they provide fundamental experiences that shape a child's understanding of the world which are emotional and moral guidence, initial socialization, and education and learning. However, while parents play a central role, outside influence also significantly impact a child's develpment which are peer relationship, educational institutions, media and technology, and community and socail environment. So I think that parents and external influences should interact dynamically in shaping a child's development.

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Good afternoon Ms. Donguen! Wow! You surprised me with your essay! You've demonstrated excellent understanding of the key issues and theories. Your explanations were clear, and you covered most of the key points relating to both consequentialism and deontology. Keep it up!
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I agree that parents undeniably hold a fundamental role in raising a child.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 From birth , they provide fundamental experiences that shape a child's understanding of the world which are emotional and moral guidance, initial socialization,  education and learning. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, while parents play a central role, outside influence also significantly impact a child's development which are peer relationship, educational institutions, media and technology, and community and social environment. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
So I think that parents and external influences should interact dynamically in shaping a child's development.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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